Cybertron
was once a peaceful and beautiful planet, but now it faces total
destruction due to the on-going civil war between the inhabitants. The
Transformers once lived together as a unified race, but that all changed with
one dangerous discovery. Energon, the very element that kept their home planet
of Cybertron running day to day, was also one that gave the
Transformers incredible power and strength. It changed them; it enhanced their output and turned them from humble workers into powerful
fighters.
It
was discovered by the future leaders of the civil war, There was Optimus Prime, who would lead the Autobots in
the fight for freedom and Megatron, who would lead the Decipticons in their
fight for power and tyranny.
It
was a conversation one day in the mines of Cybertron that sparked the civil
war.
“Optimus,
imagine what we could do with this new found power! We could command great
armies and turn Cybertron into the most powerful planet in the entire universe!
We could be leaders that are remembered throughout history and those who oppose
us will have their fluids drained and written on the walls with it as a
reminder to those who wish to defy us!” Megatron said excitedly.
“We
were not designed for that my friend! Nobody should be making that decision.
Freedom is a right that extends to all sentient beings and to say otherwise is
wrong” Optimus replied passionately.
“How
can you not see the bigger picture? There are those designed to lead and those
to follow. We are not followers, nor will we ever be from now on. We have the
ability to become great and install fear into those who cross us. Why stop
this? Why not reach our new potential? I feel now is our time as a race to
begin commanding and conquering. Let us do this together as friends.”
Optimus
shook his head when he heard this,
“You’re
not the same friend I have known for all these years now, I am sorry but I
won’t join you in this pointless façade”
“Optimus,
I suggest you stay out of my way then. You are either with me or against me.
This revolution is bigger than our friendship and if you can’t see that then
it’s clear you’re a fool.” Megatron then left the mines and started to recruit
followers for his grand revolution.
That
was before the civil war started and it seemed so long ago.
The
war had been raging now for what seemed like an eternity. The once thriving
population now lay in ruins with cold, robotic corpses scattering the
landscapes of Cybertron. Only a few Autobots now remained, as the majority were
easily overpowered by the sheer ruthless nature of those who were now driven by
greed and power.
At
a far corner of a ruined part of the city Optimus Prime was looking over the
burning landscape he once called home. This was a rare moment were the gun fire
and sounds of explosions were replaced with silence. Optimus turned to his
friend and ally, Ultra Magnus, and said:
“How
did it end up like this Ultra Magnus? This was once a beautiful place to call
home and now it’s nothing more than a desolate mechanical scrap yard.”
Ultra
Magnus replied in his usual soft spoken manner
“I
know Prime, don’t forget we all called this place home. We all worked together
and called each other comrades, we are all suffering”
“Sometimes
I forget how wise you actually are my old friend, I feel safe knowing the
Autobots have a potential leader in you”
“Prime,
I’m merely a soldier. That honour should be bestowed on someone else. “
“Don’t
be silly, I was the same when I was asked to lead the Autobots”. As Optimus
finished his sentence he cocked his pulse rifle ready to charge back into what
seemed a war that would never end. Just before he turned back to Ultra Magnus,
who also had his rifle cocked and ready;
“It
still makes me wonder, we are from the same creator and share the same
mechanical designs, and yet some see Energon as a means for total control and are willing to kill those
to get to that goal? It makes no sense to me… all I knowis that Megatron must
be stopped! No matter how long this war takes. If I could end the terror now, I
would gladly lay down my life to so.” Optimus then turned around and proceeded
into battle.
Meanwhile,
as another small area of Autobot resistance was destroyed, Megatron started to
walk through
the wreck to inspect his handy work. He was walking through what use to be another
inner city area of Cybertron… but now it resembled a twisted, metallic mess.
While walking he saw a lonesome Transformer who was crawling towards him even
though he had been shot multiple times. He was a casualty of the civil
war, he raised his head and spoke:
“Megatron,
why are you doing this to our beloved planet? What reason do you have to bring
such fear and destruction?” Megatron didn’t reply…he just smiled and laughed
before ending the robots life with a final shot in the head. He then shouted
out;
“HOW
MANY MORE OF YOUR FRIENDS MUST DIE BECAUSE OF THIS FOOLISH RESISTANCE OPTIMUS!?
YOU
ARE NEEDLESSLY LEADING YOUR FRIENDS TO SLAUGHTER AND YOU SAY I AM THE EVIL
ONE?!”
He
turned around to the masses gathered behind and rallied his troops for what he
perceived the final blow
“LET
THE SLAUGHTER CONTINUE!”
And
with that, the Transformers ran into battle again to see what would happen next
in the great Cybertronian civil war.
Hey RGreathead (what's your name by the way? I have no idea who you are haha)
ReplyDeleteThis is a great introduction to your story, i can see a lot of action happening in the future! I like the detail and background information for the characters. Just a suggestion, but maybe you could break the first paragraph into two, so it isn't too daunting to read. I found myself getting lost at different parts of it.
The part "It was that moment when the population divided by ideology" needs a 'was'. So it's "It was that moment when the population WAS divided by ideology." and the last sentence is taken not take. Just minute errors :D REALLY looking forward to the rest of the story. I looooove Transformers!
haha transformers is always a good and fun story to read.
ReplyDeletereally enjoyed the despricptive words you used to describe the battle between the autobots and decipticons.
what Julia said above i found the paragraphs were quite long and daunting as Julia stated.
but other than that nicely written and will be waiting for the final
helo,
ReplyDeleteYour story really seems full of lot of detail and your introduction seems to get the majority of that out of the way.
I look forward to the middle and end of your story as I feel you have set up the action part of narrative really well.
Hey guys, I am terribly sorry about the delay in getting this done. The draft has been turned into the final copy so please feel free now to read it and give feedback. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteHey,
ReplyDeleteYou really put a lot of thought and details into your story and rely quite a bit on dialogue. Sometimes it is hard to keep track of what is going on because the action narrative takes a back seat to the dialogue. Anyway just something I noticed but your story is nicely focused and is well thought out.
well done Richard
ReplyDeletei found the story interesting
it seeming linking to the real movie
i suggest you should make the dialogue in italics and the shouting part bold so that its easy to read and to make it more animated lol
I changed the font to what you suggested and I'll give it a go. So far I like it! Thanks for the feedback everyone!
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