Brooklyn reviews

Burlesque: One Year Later

Main characters Ali and Jack a year later from the movie Burlesque. Jack unexpectedly proposes to Ali and is nervous for her response and she doesn't react well at first. It includes Jack's proposal to Ali and her answer at the end, which is eventually yes.

This short fan fiction piece is an interesting theme but with a not so interesting approach as I find that it does not fully achieve the romance that is intended by the writer for the reader, due to the structure and chosen form of writing, i.e., present tense. "He opens a drawer and pulls out a box. He walks back towards Ali who's now staring at him with those big eyes he loves so much. He kneels down on one knee.", the story comes across as slightly blatant and rough with all the pauses and what not, lacking the softness and 'romantic effect' that I think it should possess in terms of what the story is about.


John Tucker Must Die: Both Tuckers 

John Tucker is confronted by four young woman seeking revenge on him after he gets caught out  dating three of them simultaneously. The fourth and undated girl Kate winds up stuck in the middle of an evil plot set out by the three angry and evil girls, where she is to get with john Tucker then ultimately break his heart and in the process humiliate him and reveal to the whole school the real jerk he is. Things turn when in the end, Kate dates the other Tucker brother Scott who unlike John, is the real deal for Kate. Ten months on, Kate and Scott have Thanks Giving dinner at the Tucker's where she notices John is alone. Eventually John catches Kate alone and reveals to her that although he knew what they had was a set up, he still may have loved her when they dated. Kate feels sick as the words she hears confirms her suspicions of what she knew John may have felt.

This piece is a short, although a tad predictable text however nothing I didn't enjoy. It was an interesting carry on from the actual movie, typically because the situation of dating two brothers left myself and probably a million others wondering how life after wards would be for the characters since the movie ended at Kate and Scott actually becoming a couple. The writer kept it short and sweet but still packed with nothing boring which I liked.

Sleepover: That's what I would say 

Life for the popular girls after losing to the 'unpopular' ones. After a devastating loss against the unpopular girls, leader of the popular pack Stacie is having a hard time dealing with the consequences of losing her spot at the fountain at high school in her freshman year. Sitting next to the bins at lunch time, Stacie is no longer the glowing girl she once was, therefore she begins to resent high school until she finds love in one of the 'dorks'.

I enjoyed this fanfic as it gave a good and reasonable insight to what life could of been like for the popular girls in high school after losing her expected spot at the fountain. The writer did a good job in portraying Stacie's character whilst keeping it short but very full with descriptions and events that didn't bore me. The story itself was a good follow up to how the characters could have been after the movie, something realistic and a good possible ending.

Fast and Furious: Diamond in the Rough

Dom resents Vince's new girlfriend for changing him for the better and potentially being the reason that Vince may settle down. Dom nicknamed Vince 'Coyote' as he never thought he'd see the day he'd find someone, so when everyone is happy over Vince and his new found love, Dom states otherwise. It ends with Dom talking to his partner Letty whilst watching Vince and his girlfriend playing at the beach, saying that he just knows that Vince and Alex aren't going to last and warns Letty that when it's over, they'll be the ones dealing with Vince's sour and bitter attitude.

I particularly found this story captivating as I didn't stop reading til the very end. The writer portrayed the characters exceptionally well through her use of dialogue and descriptions, giving the characters personalities that truly matched the actual characters in the The Fast and Furious movie. The portrayal of the characters were very recognizable and the sunny beach setting which allowed me to easily paint a picture in my head of the story as I read on. I found this fanfiction to be well thought out and written, although I do admit I became confused at times due to the way lay out of the writing but overall a good read with excellent grammar.


Orphan: Sweet Revenge

Events following the murder of the the father of the Colemans and Esther's attack on Kate. This piece follows what may have occurred if 9 year old impostor Esther was not killed by adoptive mother Kate Coleman as Kate was the only one confirmed her bad vibes about Esther and discovered her adopted daughter was actually an adult woman named Leena, a psychotic and former mental institution patient with a condition that meant she looked like a young child who took advantage of her looks to enter families of men she liked. Esther jumped from various orphanages, murdering and manipulating the families that took her in when the fathers did not 'love her back' after attempting to seduce them. The story catches on from where Esther returns to the house bloodied and bare of any make up and begins to dress herself up back to the 9 year old girl she portrayed whilst talking to herself suggesting her resentment towards 'never being loved'. She then answers the door to the police making it out as if she were hiding as Kate murdered the father in a drunken rampage. Much to her delight she is speaking to a friendly and good looking police officer, it ends with her introducing herself and him taking her to the ambulance.


I rather enjoyed this fan fiction as in the end of the actual movie, Kate does indeed almost die and Esther almost gets away with murder once again. However, because Esther is actually a grown woman, she is intelligently manipulative and due to her tracks being already traced in the movie following the murder she may have not tried to move onto another family. But all in all it's a good piece, nicely written and gave good possible insight and motive of Esther never feeling loved which is a realistic reason as to why she may have did what she did.